Thursday, March 22, 2012

Ghostly Alpaca


Authors Note: This is a Writing piece using a series of words that were given to us in a Literature group meeting last week. It may not make perfect sense but it was fun. The words that were given are highlighted. 


She was biking down a street in New York. She was largely interested in Ghostly appearances. She figured that New York would be a great place to find some haunted houses. She got back to her apartment and walked into the kitchen. She saw that she had a missed phone call and a voice mail.
"Hi, this is Britney I heard that you were a good place to go for haunted things, I need you to come over to this address on Saturday, March 5th. Thank you, Rosalie."
Rosalie looked at the calendar and it was the 4th. She heard a very loud noise come from behind her. She spun around and saw that it was just her platypus, Rose.  Rosalie started laughing, how could she get scared by her adorable pet platypus? She figured she needed some sleep. She walked up the stairs and fell on to here bed and fell asleep.

The next morning she got dressed in to a tank top and some shorts, it's supposed to be warm today. She sat down in a chair at her table after she poured herself a bowl of Cookie Crisp cereal. She turned on the T.V. to see SpongeBob on talking about Krabby patties. She turned off the T.V. and walked outside to get her bike. She got on and was off the address on the phone call. The sun was a bright orange and looked awesome. It took some time and wrong turns to find the house. The first thing she saw was a large, fluffy, alpaca standing in the front yard. Rosalie walked up to the door and rang the bell. Britney opened the door and invited her in.  Britney told her that she had been hearing weird noises at night. Rosalie asked if she could spend the night and Britney agreed.

Later that night, it started storming, not light and quiet, but loud and heavy. There was a lot of lightning and the rain was making a waterfall of the roof. Then, there was a loud banging noise inside the house. Rosalie quickly got up and ran into the kitchen where Britney was. Britney said that it was just the hammer she got for Hanukah, not the weird noises. Then outside there was a moaning, a very loud eerie noise. Rosalie ran to the window and saw the alpaca outside moaning. Britney said that was the noise. Rosalie told Britney what the noise was and was thanked for her help. Rosalie said her goodbyes and got back on her bike to go home. "Another mystery solved" Rosalie thought to here self as she rode through the woods back home.

4 comments:

  1. It was hard to read because the words were in white and highlighted.

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  2. I think your piece flowed nicely considering the strange words you used. The big thing I would work on is avoiding starting sentences with the same word. The first paragraph only had sentences that started with she. Otherwise, good job.

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  3. I think that your piece was not too confusing like everyone elses. I agree with Callie that it flowed well with your entire writing piece. Nice job!

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  4. I agree with the girls, your piece flowed nicely with the words. This was one of the few stories that really did not go off topic that I have read. The last paragraph the words in white are hard to read but overall it was good.

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